Meleny Amherst

[Meleny Amherst]

Meleny Julianna Amherst
Seventh, Gryffindor

Age: 17

Gender: Female

Blood: Muggle- Born

Alliance: The Order

Appearance: Meleny has long straight brown hair and blue eyes. She never does anything with her hair, so its always down. She also dosen't wear any makeup. She's a very casual person, dosen't care what she's wearing and isn't very uniform except for the hogwarts gown and of course the Quidditch robes.Meleny's eyes usually shift whenever she sees someone doing something they aren't supposed to be doing.She's skinny and her skin is kind of pale.

Certian emotions she feels very strongly show through her eyes such as pain and saddness.However the main emotions you'd see in her eyes will be suspician (if she meets a mysterious person.) and anger. Meleny looks more like her mother than her father, she has her eyes and hair. Despite, being casual and never putting her hair up, Meleny always manages to look clean and tidy. She's also a bit slender. Meleny wears very bright clothing because it sets off her personality.


Personality: Meleny is a very sweet person and overly emotional.She lets her fears control her and is often called "weak" because of it.She knows its true but always denys it.Meleny cares about her friends alot but even though she is afraid of dying she'll throw herself into danger to protect them if she had to.Meleny would often be found at the scene of a disaster consoling someone close to her who was in pain.Pain and distress are her alarm clock.Her favorite thing to do besides play Quidditch is to help people in need her ambition after hogwarts is to become a healer at st mungos hospital.

However,she has a wicked temper so watch out! Her parents irritate her to no end Even though some might think,she is weak because of the emotional part of her personality she is tough when she wants to be.She dosen't have very much confidence because of her muggle parents. She's also very intelligent which she inherited from her mother. She inherited her temper from her father.

Meleny is sometimes quiet and withdrawn because she'd rather be left alone than let her temper become elevated. She'll only talk if she likes someone and your good to her. Meleny never goes down without a fight.


History: Meleny was born an only child to Richard and Julie Amherst. She grew up in a strict family with academic backgrounds. For instance,her mother is a lawyer and her father is a doctor. Meleny is the only witch in her family. After her 1st year at Hogwarts she didn't want to go back home because of her academic obsessed parents. They want her to be either a lawyer or a doctor but Meleny wants to stay in the wizarding world. She wants to work at st mungos hospital after her 7th year and maybe join the order.

She dosen't have very much family so she's learned to take care of herself. Because of her parents, Meleny carries so much anger in her and it dosen't help the fact that Gryffindor is enemies with slytherin. Meleny is more unusual than you think,her temper causes her to be a lethal weapon in conflicts with slytherins but only when she has a random boost of confidence and she feels like she can take on any slytherin that gets in her way.

When Meleny was little, her parents moved around a lot and finally settled down in Oxfordshire, England where her mother currently works at the law firm and her father at the hospital. At first she lived in New York which is where her parents first met at a hospital convention where Julie worked before becoming a lawyer.

While living in New York, Meleny atttended a muggle boarding school. Her parents wanted her to learn ettiquette instead of magic. She was there until the age of 11 when her parents pulled her out of school to get ready to move to Massachusetts.




Likes: hanging with friends, Quidditch, good magic.

Dislikes: Voldemort, death eaters, pain and suffering, Professor Snape, Slytherins, dark magic.

Family: Richard and Juliet Amherst

Sample RP: Meleny Amherst walked through the corridors towards the room of requirement. Her D.A coin was in her pocket blazing hot. She looked behind her to make sure nobody was following her. She was a very paranoid person and couldn't help it. The school seemed to be crawling with death eaters and she didn't feel safe anymore. She mostly hid in the common room or walked around the grounds. She seized every opportunity she could to get out of the castle. She seemed to have lost count of everyone who were death eaters. Whenever she came across someone mysterious in the corridors, the classrooms, wherever she always recieved a forboding feeling from the person she encountered. It scared her. It especially scared her that the nurse was a death eater.

'Where was Madam Pomfrey?' She often found herself wondering as she passed the hospital wing on her way to classes or passing the hospital wing to get anywhere around the castle. Sometimes she wondered if the new matron had tortured Madam Pomfrey and took her job. These terrible thoughts were giving her a headache and she needed to be focused for the D.A meeting.

She came across the familiar blank strip of wall that was the room of requirement. She was in the D.A in her fifth year and was glad the meetings had resumed since Hogwarts was facing dangerous times. "I need the D.A room."she thought trying to push the negative thoughts out of her head. The door appeared and she seized the handle and walked in and saw her fellow Gryffindors Harry, Lavender, Ron and Ginny. "Hey." she said smiling at them hoping she didn't appear too frightened to them. She tried to hide her paranoid nature from her enemies and it had become somewhat of a habit during these dark and difficult times since the school was swimming with death eaters. She couldn't trust anybody except for her closest friends but there were so many death eaters. How could she know if one of her friends were death eaters?

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[Hermione Granger]

I really like this application. Most of my concerns are small ones.


First of all, I noticed that between some of your sentences, you don't put a space. You don't have to fix it, just be careful of it.

Second, in the first appearance paragraph you state that she wears her Hogwarts robes and Quidditch robes. You may apply for the Quidditch team after you are accepted, but until then, you must write your application as if she is not on the team, in case she is not accepted on the team (though she probably will be).

Again, watch your grammar. You have a period inside of some parentheses, even though it is not the end of the sentence.

In her personality, you state that she is not very brave. From what we know, Neville was the only Gryffindor who was not very brave, and that was a special circumstance because he proved himself later on. I know you said she puts aside her fears if her friends are in danger, but maybe if you say that she is brave concerning her friends all the time, not only when they are in danger, she would be more suited for Gryffindor.

I think the third paragraph of her personality should be lengthened a few sentences.

I have a few concerns about the history. The first is that you change tense a lot in those paragraphs. It should really be past tense, since it's talking about her past. Second, the parts about her personality should be at the end, because they don't fit in the middle of the history.

Those are not as important as her living in America until she was eleven. Wizards and Witches are found and placed on a Hogwarts list at a young age, and she would have had to have lived in England from at least seven years old. She could have moved from NY to England when she was starting school, but to have lived in America until she was eleven would have put her on a list for an American Wizarding school, not a British one.

Overall, as I said, I really do like your application. I'm sorry if I sound rude, but I'm just trying to help you build a strong application.

[Hermione Granger]

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