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Post by starrburst on Oct 1, 2007 21:30:01 GMT -5
 Danielle Rhyleigh HendersonSeventh Year, Ravenclaw
Age
Seventeen
Gender
Female
Blood
Pure
Alliance
Good
Appearance
Danii is a pretty girl, in sort of an unconventional way. She isn't as plastic as most girls are, she's a lot more real. Her long wavy chestnut hair doesn't always look perfect, and most of the time she couldn't care less. Danii's long hair falls to the middle of her back, and seven times out of ten she wears her hair up. Also, her hair has a wonderful natural shine to it. Danii has yet to color her hair however, she probably never will because she loves it so much. Danii has the dullest green eyes, with steel blue flecks through them. They are completely gorgeous. Her eyes are her 'tell-tale' facial feature. It's relatively simple to tell if Danii's happy, or upset. However, many people don't care. They've grown cold. Danii's perfect smile hasn't always been perfect. She had to suffer with braces for three years. Talk about killer.
Danii's face is very well proportioned, from her high cheek bones to her well set eyes, it's all perfect, well at least in Danii's opinion. Danii is a very petite girl. At most times she looks very frail, but she isn't really that frail at all. Danii stands at 5'4, and weighs about 108lbs. She may be skinny, maybe even too skinny, but it's never bothered her. In fact she would much rather stay her weight right now then gain or lose any more weight. Most of the people around he believe that Danii is anorexic, but she definately isn't. However, she does posses the thin frame of a runway model. Generally
Danii's a rather pale girl, with skin the color of alabaster. When she was younger she used to be embarrassed of her skin tone. However, she's out grown that. Danii realizes how beautiful her pale cream skin really is and she takes amazing care of it. Danii really loves her body, and she treats it like a temple. No junk food, only organic food for Danii. Also Danii hits up the gym at least 3 times a week, and she tries to join as many school sports as she can to stay fit. Which tends to interfere with her social life, but she loves her body. It's one of the only things that she really has to be proud of at the moment. She isn't popular, she doesn't have a boyfriend at the moment so her appearance is right up there on her list of important things.
From dressed down to dressed up Danii wears it all! Danii's a pretty trendy girl. She likes to wear clothes that are stylish, and also make her feel good about herself. From Old Navy to Abercrombie to Hollister she has it all. Danii also enjoys shopping in other little designer boutiques. However there are days when she will wear things that generally she wouldn't be comfortable in, like a tiny mini skirt and a non-existant top. Idealy if Danii could she would wear sweats everyday. She is in love with sweat pants. She HATES wearing robes
Personality
Danii comes off to everyone as being a very outgoing, confident person. And she never seems to care what everyone else really thinks about her, especially when it comes to the girls at school. Danii doesn't doubt that she's a , she knows it, and she really doesn't care. But after tormenting her older brother for seventeen years, of course she knows it. And Danii definitely doesn't care if anyone, and everyone thinks that she's a mega . Danii's well aware that not everyone is in love with her, and most times is really doesn't even phase her. Sure she may be in the cut throat world of highschool but in all honesty it doesn't really matter to her what others think, even thought it should matter. Danii is actually her biggest critic though, and most of the time impressing herself is hard than impressing those around her. Danii also adores being the center of attention. Throughout her first couple years in highschool she was popular, and she loves that attention.
Danii's very open with her views on sex, and everyone knows the way she feels about the topic. Danii is opposed to sex before marriage, and that tends to have a negative effect on her social status. Many boys would give anything to be with her, but she will not cave into them at all. The girls think of her as a prude but it hasn't effected Danii's descision at all. She's going to wait until she's found that one special boy. Danii's views on sex however, do not effect the way she feels about partying. Danii loves to party, and to have fun when she's out.
Danii's also one of the most independent young, which isn't really all that odd considering she has 7 older siblings and 1 younger one. But her parents did baby her for most of her life. Danii's parents still tend to baby her from time to time, and she's now Seventeen. Danii quickly learned how to take care of herself at a young age. Her parents spent more time taking care of her older and younger siblings, and working than helping Danii, but she still got whatever she wanted. Danii is able to make friends very quickly as a result of her manipulative yet loving nature. However, Danii can be catty and y to other girls if need be, especially when Boys are invovled. But believe it or not Danii loves to make new friends. Danii is also a really big fan of having fun, with her friends, with boys or at parties.. as long as it's fun she's in! Danii is definitely a flat-out party girl. It doesn't look like she'll be stopping anytime soon especially with the way she caries on. Drugs and Drinking are always on the menu when Danii's out looking for a good time. Danii also adores acting, Danii's a really big drama queen and she would love to act someday.
Eventhough it may not sound fitting for Danii, but she thinks of others way too much. Although most of the time Danii comes off as being really selfish. A lot of the time she'd rather make others happy, rather than being happy herself. It's been a long while since Danii's been completely and truly happy herself. She may play it off like she's happy, but she really isn't, and she fools a lot of people with her act. Also Danii gossips way to much! She talks about most people behind their backs, and she spreads rumors, that nine times out of ten, tend to be true. Finally Danii has caused many problems, mostly with boys and shaking things up. She may be opposed to sex before marriage, but she's still very protective of her boys. Well what do you expect, she's a huge attention sleeper. Hopefully it's not in vain. But then again it's Danii, so it most likely is.
History
In December of 1989 Danielle Rhyleigh Henderson was born to the massive Henderson family. She already had seven siblings, Richard, Marcus, James, Katherine , Michael, Rochelle, and Chase[twin]. Later her younger sister Elaine[Now 15] was born. Danii really enjoyed having so many older siblings, especially when she was younger. For her first couple years of life things were completely fantastic! She was the spoiled little princess in the family. Danii got whatever her little heart desired, and she hoped that it would always be like that. And being the fabulous child she was why would it not be. She had to be her parents favorite, it was what she aimed for no matter what. And man did she suceed with that one. She had cause so many issues with the family that her older brothers, Marcus and James, seemed to hate her life... a lot. Danii always felt different from the other kids, and she could never explain why.
Growing up was average for Danii, with the exception of having a very lagre family that is. She went to school and got completely amazing marks, which was just another reason for Marcus and James to hate her. And part of her actually enjoyed the fact that they had always been so jealous of her, and the attention that she recieved from everyone. But Danii did have her ups, and most certinaly her downs. Throughout the primary grades in school she was teased a lot, and didn't have too many friends. And surprisingly this affected the poor young girl a lot more than it really should have. Danii became quite withdrawn whenever she left the houes. Danii figured that if she was quiet enough she would disappear and then the teasing would stop. But it really didn't stop until she got a little bit older. She still felt as though she didn't belong
Danii got her letter for Hogwarts when she was ten. Danii willingly accepted eventhough she didn't understand what all of that was about. Her parents filler her in. Danii started Hogwarts and loved it, she was actually popular. The boys and the catty girls had 'apparently' grown up a little bit since they were four and they stopped teasing and pestering Danii, plus she started to feel 'normal' around these people. At home Danii was still the princess, and she would always use that to her advantage. Her parents had no idea what Dani was into. And it seemed as if they really didn't care. But that didn't bother Danii. Danii believed it would change how her parents saw her... and she couldn't have that.
Since then Danii's gone through Hogwarts with friends, and she been having a ton of fun! There's absolultely no stopping this girl when she's got her head or her heart on something. Danii is determined to help defeat the 'evil' forces and live in a world where everyone lives in peace. Danii is excited to be in her last year at Hogwarts and she can't wait to move on in life. Her goal for this year is to find a boy who likes her.. a lot and date him..
Likes
Boys
Friends
Old Movies
Music
Parties
Fun
Rain
Fashion
Dislikes
Being Cold
B.itches
Liars
Pineapple
Being Alone
Cattiness
Snow
Family
Parents } ♥;
Thomas Henderson[58] --> Father
Sarah-Lynne Henderson[56] --> Mother
Siblings } ♥;
Richard Henderson[37] --> Brother
Marcus Henderson[35] --> Brother
James Henderson [32] --> Brother
Katherine Henderson[28] --> Sister
Michael Henderson[22] --> Brother
Rochelle Henderson [19] --> Sister
Chase Henderson [17] --> Twin Brother
Elaine Henderson [13] --> Sister
Sample RP
Danii sat under a tree near the skate park at 11:55pm. Sure it may have been a little late to be out alone, but she didn't care. Nothing remotely dangerous ever happened around town, so why would bad things start now? The over sized sweater Danii sported belonged to one of her exs. It was big and comfy, so she never gave it back once they broke up. Danii was also wearing a pair of jeans and a light blue camy under the sweater. It was pretty chilly tonight even thought it was still September. And still considered summer.
Danii was having a little trouble having to spend so much time in a dorm room with three other girls. Growing up she had way more brothers than sisters, so having that many girls in a small space wasn't much fun for Danii. Sure the girls were her friends, but Danii couldn't stand spending that much time with someone. So hence why she was at the park so late... and on a school night too. Generally not something Danii would do, but it was time to break out of her norm and live a little. Well if you call sitting under a tree at midnight living.
The moon was full, and a surprising amount of stars were out Danii, who was really into spending time alone, had her knees pulled into her chest. Her arms were deicately placed around her knees and her cheek was resting softly on one of her knees. Danii was staring out at the star infested sky. It was so beautiful out. Danii took in a deep breath and closed her eyes for a second. Things were so quite and calm around her and oddly enough the normal chaotic Danii was very calm tonight. Danii smiled to herself as she took in the moment.
Eventhough Danii loved spending time to herself, there was a part of her that really wanted someone to show up and maybe keep her company. Danii was a very complex girl. She could want one thing one minute, and something completely different the next. But was that not the same with everyother girl? That's all Danii was, just that girl. She was normal. She never thought she had anything special to offer anyone. But she definately had to be wrong with that one.
Danii sighed slightly as the wind blew gentily, blowing her long chestunt locks around her face. Danii tucked a few pieces of her hair behind her ears, as she looked up at the stars. The stars never seemed to bright, Danii never really thought that there could be so many stars. But she really didn't mind at all. The stars were beautiful, and they reminded her of really good times while she was growing up. Danii had a really great childhood. There wasn't too much tragedy and she loved having such a big family. It felt a little weird for Danii to be out on her own, especially after such a hectic childhood.
Danii was out alone with good reason though. She was trying to get the week out of her head. The school work was getting tough, and she wasn't sue how much more she would be able to take before she broke down. Danii was just that kind of girl. She would get so stressed beyond belief and then just break down. It happened last year, but not to many people really knew about it. Danii needed to get away, and it was only the end of September. If it was bad now, Danii wondered how much worse it may get throughout the year. She sighed slightly, it wasn't working School was still everywhere. And boy did she hate it.
Danii took another deep breath and glanced to her left. There he stood. The boy. The one that waltzed right into her life at the beginning of the year. He was so beautiful. There was something about him that Danii was totally drawn to. It was something she couldn't explain, and she wasn't sure if she wanted to be able to. Danii was hooked by this boy and she couldn't do anything about it. She was stuck. Danii turned back to the water and the stars not knowing if he would actually make his way over to her. But boy did she wish he would. And suddenly that was all she could ever begin to think about.
Danii heard the sweet words escape the boy's lips, and her heart stopped. It wasn't exactly a normal occurance for Danii to be totally smitten, but she was definately smitten now. She turned her head slightly to look over at him. He had already taken a seat next to her. Danii wasn't even sure if her heart had started beating again. There was just that something about him. "Hey" Danii responded. "What's up?" she added still looking at the beautiful boy sitting next to her. Travis.
Signature Claim
Sophia Bush
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Post by Hermione Granger on Oct 2, 2007 13:41:06 GMT -5
I like this. It's very well written and is very good, but there are a few things that need to be edited. It may seem like a lot, but most of it is little things. These are the sentences in which you describe Danii's looks as 'gorgeous' and such. You can say she thinks her looks are beautiful, or that they are pretty, but saying that she is beautiful and such is not up to you. It is up to the characters who interact with your character. Hogwarts doesn't have a gym, and the only sport is Quidditch, which your character hasn't been accepted on the team here yet. I'm not sure these brands were around in England in the early 1990's. The paragraph in which you talk about sex, get rid of it. Few, if any students in Hogwarts have had sex. Harry didn't even get his first kiss until he was in his fifth year. You capitalize some words in your paragraphs that should not be capitalized. You don't have to fix this, but just be aware of this. In Hogwarts? I think the closest anyone's come to doing drugs or drinking is Moody and Mundungus. so take that out. She can have good marks, but having amazing marks is Mary-Sue. Very Mary-Sue. Also, her having no friends and being bullied all the time is very Mary-Sue. She could have been bullied, but have had a few friends. Or, she could have no friends, but no one bullies her. Both is way too Mary-Sue. Hogwarts students don't get their letters of acceptance until they are eleven or twelve. Eleven, if they are born between January and August. Twelve if they are born after September first (that makes them a year older than everyone else in their year). Are her parents Muggles? Because few Muggles know all about Hogwarts. If at least one of her parents was magical, then I doubt all of her siblings wouldn't receive a letter. At least one other would. She changed so quickly? There must have been something to make her change her shy, bullied personality. Just so you know, this site has rules against anything too graphic: 9. There is no sexual content whatsoever. You can makeout for all I care, but do NOT go further than that, please. |
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Post by Hermione Granger on Oct 14, 2007 10:18:40 GMT -5
Because your application has not been edited within a week, it will be moved to Unfinished Applications board. You may edit it from there, and when you complete it please post so the staff know you have finished.
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